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Contemplating Existence

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What happens when your internal monologue stops?
You avoid stepping on cracks.
(you also stop writing poetry)
it is so awkward trying to force it out.
I can imagine my internal monologue on vacation somewhere,
Sipping pina-colattas in Myrtle Beach.
On the beach, under the early autumn sun, meanwhile,
I'm here, beautiful bland Illinois.
I've thought about thinking and my lack thereof.
So this leads me to wonder...
Am I?
It may be hard for any observer to try and answer for me.
So the responsibility is mine to figure out if I do in fact exist.
My gut says no
(I can agree with this because it is a phrase and not a feeling)
That would explain a lot to me if it were true.
Why I'm alone in a world of my own doing.
The actual title of this peice wouldn't fit in the title section: the original title was "What happens when the mind is away"
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mangohooka's avatar
very existential: Am I?

I like this piece a lot but would I would like to see more of is rhythm. Though the piece has a lot of creative parts, this has taken a prose-like feel in poetic structure. Spoken word is about making me feel, not showing me. I don't want to pigeon-hole poetry, but I think you would benefit from reading some other's spoken word so that you can be more open to not only explaining to me the depth of an internal monologue but put me IN that internal monologue. Engage me. Good work, and I hope that you keep on writing. Another thing, you should try recording your voice.. just speak it, and then write it.. it helps make things more "real"